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Olympic History

20 Jun

Have a look at this piece of writing by Echo and Sam. What do you think of it? Can you list two stars and a wish?

When did the Olympics start?

The Olympics started in Greece in 776 BC. They were a series of brutal games in honour of Zeus (King of the gods.)

Events and games

On the first day of the Olympics they had a short sprint from one side of the stadium to the other. Gradually more and more events where added to the Olympics, to make four days complete. The events were Wrestling, Boxing, Long Jump, Javelin, Discuss and Chariot racing. The toughest event was the race of the Hoplites, who were men wearing amour and carrying shields.

Spectators

About 50,000 people could sit in the Olympia stadium. Athletes had hotel rooms, but spectators had to find a place to put their tents up on a field.

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23 Comments

Posted by on June 20, 2012 in Information

 

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23 responses to “Olympic History

  1. LC

    June 20, 2012 at 10:25 am

    i like how you added (King of the gods.)
    the intro is very short
    i think ”They were a series of brutal games” is a good scentence

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      June 20, 2012 at 10:26 am

      Can you explain your comments further?

       
  2. HS ES

    June 20, 2012 at 10:25 am

    Well i certinally think that was better than our one.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      June 20, 2012 at 10:26 am

      Perhaps, but what about 2 stars and a wish?

       
  3. RC o-{-

    June 20, 2012 at 10:27 am

    STAR: “They were a series of brutal games in honour” This is a really good sentence with you teling us what its about!
    STAR: The long list of events is really good and I like the way you said some more were added on.
    WISH: The hoplites was a race, not a group of men.
    🙂 o-{- Good , well done!

     
  4. Anonymous

    June 20, 2012 at 10:28 am

    *Greet facts 🙂
    *Understandable 🙂
    #Sub headings middle of the page:(

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      June 20, 2012 at 10:28 am

      Can you explain further?

       
      • TA EW

        June 20, 2012 at 10:32 am

        smilys 🙂 mean stars
        sad 😦 means wish

         
      • mrcobbsclass

        June 20, 2012 at 12:12 pm

        I really meant expand your answers, explain why?

         
  5. AM FHC

    June 20, 2012 at 10:28 am

    we both liked this sentence “They were a series of brutal games in honour of Zeus (King of the gods”)

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      June 20, 2012 at 10:29 am

      I liked it too. Why was it so good?

       
  6. AM FHC

    June 20, 2012 at 10:29 am

    Amaryllis: i did this bit too. they had a short sprint from one side of the stadium to the other.

     
  7. TA EW

    June 20, 2012 at 10:29 am

    quite simple
    good facts

     
  8. MK KH

    June 20, 2012 at 10:29 am

    We liked the information on it was very fastarnating but we think your paragraphs are really short
    and you have some really good infomation.

     
  9. ETP and RM

    June 20, 2012 at 10:30 am

    I really like how you told us all about the diffirent events they did.
    and now i know that they had a pretty big stadium 50,000 people !
    though next time make your introduction longer.

     
  10. TS & Amy

    June 20, 2012 at 10:30 am

    wish : just a bit less punctuation next time OK ?

    star : We like the way you say that Zues was the king of the gods so the pepol that did not know who is Zues you told them good job!

     
  11. LL AG

    June 20, 2012 at 10:30 am

    We like how you start at the begining of the Olympics and then make your way up to later in the games. We also like how you state that it’s in honour of Zeus. You could mayde write abit more but overall its really good.

     
  12. LC

    June 20, 2012 at 10:31 am

    my reason for not liking the intro being short is because it could of had more info

     
  13. SH Lego builder BDG Lego builder

    June 20, 2012 at 10:31 am

    cool writing eg sb I like the bit that says ‘there were a series of brutal games in honour of Zues’

     
  14. LS NL

    June 20, 2012 at 10:31 am

    THAT WAS REALLY GOOD.
    star:The way you spread it out was really good.
    Star: you have used good punction
    wish: I do not think there is a wish

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      June 20, 2012 at 10:32 am

      There’s always something that can be improved.

       
  15. SB KG

    June 20, 2012 at 10:32 am

    We this is a good piece of writing because…..

    *Good punctuation.
    *Good sub-headings.
    Wish- Check your spellings.

     

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