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The Nemean Lion

30 Apr

Have a look at this start to a piece of writing about Heracles’ mission to kill the Nemean Lion. What impresses you? Can you identify some powerful words, or complex sentences? What could this person improve next time?

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Posted by on April 30, 2012 in Information

 

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12 responses to “The Nemean Lion

  1. natalie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    April 30, 2012 at 1:16 pm

    WOW kaiya that was so cool .

     
  2. FHC

    April 30, 2012 at 1:28 pm

    i liked the
    i saw the scarlet blood trickling down my finger.

     
  3. LS

    April 30, 2012 at 1:32 pm

    I like the bit were it says the scarlet red blood trickling down my dirty hand

     
  4. Anonymous

    April 30, 2012 at 1:47 pm

    joe

    hi i come from biddy ave primary, i like the scarlet blood trickiling down my hand but you really need to focus on more description that was the only reallly described bit.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      April 30, 2012 at 8:03 pm

      Thanks for the comment Joe. The piece of writing was the start of a piece which was retelling the story – in the next bit she really describes the cave.

       
  5. chloe

    April 30, 2012 at 1:49 pm

    I like the bit where you sowly creped

     
  6. BDG lego builder

    April 30, 2012 at 8:06 pm

    Well done I like the section that say’s ” I dared to enter the lair of the Nemean Lion”.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      April 30, 2012 at 8:44 pm

      I like the “dared to …” bit too. Why do you think its so good?

       
  7. Es famus singer

    May 1, 2012 at 11:47 am

    I think its good because its better then enterd

     
  8. lauren h

    May 2, 2012 at 2:25 pm

    wow some really good words in there well done!

     
  9. Shyna

    May 2, 2012 at 10:41 pm

    I like the way you wrote heaps. We would have liked to know a bit more about the setting. We loved your sentence starters.

     
  10. Charlie

    May 4, 2012 at 11:54 am

    it was very interesting and good openers

     

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