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Improve This Sentence

06 Feb

As a quick starter to our information writing, try and improve these basic sentences about Boudicca.

Boudicca wanted revenge.
She got an army.
They marched on Camulodunum Londinium and Verulamium.

See how you could improve these sentences using VCOP. Think about extending them with extra description and clauses.
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Posted by on February 6, 2012 in Information

 

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3 responses to “Improve This Sentence

  1. ARG SB

    February 7, 2012 at 2:05 pm

    Boudicca wanted to revenge over the Carthagenians.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      February 7, 2012 at 6:45 pm

      Could you add a reason why she wanted revenge? Use because perhaps to add this part to the sentence.

       
  2. mrcobbsclass

    February 7, 2012 at 6:46 pm

    Why did she want revenge. Add because … to explain.

     

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