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100 WC Week 16 – Scarlett

16 Jan

5472 years ago a man was walking with his daughter up to a Roman inn. That very day, the Roman Empire had decided that it was time for a Battle; they had been sitting around for over 100 years! But still nothing exciting had happened. They walked to the door and knocked 3 times. An eye appeared through a tiny little hole. “Get in ‘ere quick” whispered the man who was now unlocking the door. Then there was a scream. The daughter turned around to see what the matter was, walking towards her were men of all kind and suddenly all at once they fell over…

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8 responses to “100 WC Week 16 – Scarlett

  1. GoofyJ

    January 17, 2012 at 11:26 pm

    Well done, Scarlett! I love that you set it long ago in the Roman Empire. You used some great visuals, like the eye appearing through a tiny hole. Don’t forget to put a comma before your end quotation marks, though. (“Get in ‘ere quick,” whispered the man….) Also, good work on your character’s accent.

     
  2. MK

    January 18, 2012 at 11:53 am

    WELL DONE Scarlett i really your story because it tell`s you when it time that it happend. 🙂 🙂

     
  3. asialydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:42 pm

    WOW!!! a lot of mystery going on ! i could read this over and over again . i love it !

     
  4. ameliatlydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:44 pm

    This is so cool!I learned a lot from this story! bye the way i am from lydd primary school keep up the good work!

     
  5. jadewhiney

    January 18, 2012 at 2:47 pm

    Well done that was fantastic!

     
  6. marcuslydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:48 pm

    I like the fact that you blogged about the Romans. Well done

     
  7. KG KB

    January 23, 2012 at 10:25 am

    WOW that is a really good story and like the detail that is included, They walked to the door and knocked 3 times especially this part,i think it would sound really good if it was continued. And i am glad that you put this story on the blog because me and KB really enjoyed reading it well done

     
  8. mrcobbsclass

    January 26, 2012 at 8:15 pm

    This was a good piece of writing Scarlett, I enjoyed the description of the action and character. If I was being picky I would say that the first sentence or two are not needed. I would have preferred more about the door opening and the soldiers coming through.

     

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