100 WC Week 16 – Scarlett

16 Jan

5472 years ago a man was walking with his daughter up to a Roman inn. That very day, the Roman Empire had decided that it was time for a Battle; they had been sitting around for over 100 years! But still nothing exciting had happened. They walked to the door and knocked 3 times. An eye appeared through a tiny little hole. “Get in ‘ere quick” whispered the man who was now unlocking the door. Then there was a scream. The daughter turned around to see what the matter was, walking towards her were men of all kind and suddenly all at once they fell over…


Posted by on January 16, 2012 in Information



8 responses to “100 WC Week 16 – Scarlett

  1. GoofyJ

    January 17, 2012 at 11:26 pm

    Well done, Scarlett! I love that you set it long ago in the Roman Empire. You used some great visuals, like the eye appearing through a tiny hole. Don’t forget to put a comma before your end quotation marks, though. (“Get in ‘ere quick,” whispered the man….) Also, good work on your character’s accent.

  2. MK

    January 18, 2012 at 11:53 am

    WELL DONE Scarlett i really your story because it tell`s you when it time that it happend. 🙂 🙂

  3. asialydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:42 pm

    WOW!!! a lot of mystery going on ! i could read this over and over again . i love it !

  4. ameliatlydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:44 pm

    This is so cool!I learned a lot from this story! bye the way i am from lydd primary school keep up the good work!

  5. jadewhiney

    January 18, 2012 at 2:47 pm

    Well done that was fantastic!

  6. marcuslydd

    January 18, 2012 at 2:48 pm

    I like the fact that you blogged about the Romans. Well done

  7. KG KB

    January 23, 2012 at 10:25 am

    WOW that is a really good story and like the detail that is included, They walked to the door and knocked 3 times especially this part,i think it would sound really good if it was continued. And i am glad that you put this story on the blog because me and KB really enjoyed reading it well done

  8. mrcobbsclass

    January 26, 2012 at 8:15 pm

    This was a good piece of writing Scarlett, I enjoyed the description of the action and character. If I was being picky I would say that the first sentence or two are not needed. I would have preferred more about the door opening and the soldiers coming through.


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