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100 WC Week 16 – Toby

15 Jan

One thousand nine hundred and ninety-three years ago in Pompeii, a volcano called ‘Mount Vesuvius’ was near the city. There was a citizen named Enrico. Some citizens of Pompeii ran before the terrible eruption. But not Enrico. One tragic day it erupted. Enrico heard it and ran out of his house. The pressure was on. He ran like a torpedo, bursting through the water. The amount of air hitting his face was almost painful. There was a immensely big crash. All at once they fell over. Lava was flowing everywhere, covering Enrico.
2012 : An archaeologist uncovered Enrico and found a folded piece of paper saying’…Run…

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Posted by on January 15, 2012 in Information

 

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4 responses to “100 WC Week 16 – Toby

  1. RC

    January 16, 2012 at 11:54 am

    This story’s description is amzing! The torpedo running bit made me think ‘cool!’ And the end is amazing. (2012 : An archaeologist uncovered Enrico and found a folded piece of paper saying’…Run…) This gripped me. :l

     
  2. Es famous singer

    January 16, 2012 at 11:55 am

    whoa that end is brill! I loved how you discribed the lava comeing down the volcano!

     
  3. 100WC Team Miss Savory

    January 17, 2012 at 6:12 pm

    A great 100WC entry, Toby. I agree about how good the torpedo simile is. I also really enjoyed the way you used shorter sentences to show the panic.

     
  4. Kip McGrath Scunthorpe

    January 19, 2012 at 4:56 pm

    What a great idea Sam to combine history and fiction. I have enjoyed reading some great historical fiction novels. You build up the tension well in your writing. You have selected some exceellent vocabulary. Try varying your sentence starters.

    Clare Powell (Team 100WC)

     

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