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100 WC Week 10 – Amy

20 Nov

It all started when it was my 14th birthday. We had a birthday picnic as a big celebration [ I love scrummy picnics ] when my dad said “what a strange tree ! “. I turned a round to see a circle shaped tree its leaves were muddy brown and amber orange. But as I turned round it changed shape. It didn’t take long to notice we were not alone.

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Posted by on November 20, 2011 in Homework

 

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5 responses to “100 WC Week 10 – Amy

  1. mrcobbsclass

    November 20, 2011 at 8:39 pm

    Great to read your story Amy, I like the suspense at the end of the writing – what will happen next? I also like the way you described the tree “a circle shaped tree its leaves were muddy brown and amber orange” using a ” its leaves…” Very clever! If I was being picky there should be a comma between the “circle shaped tree” and “its leaves were …” – it just makes it easier for a reader to read the writing as you intended. But well done!! A star piece of work!

     
  2. Hannah Shelton

    November 20, 2011 at 10:07 pm

    Your 100WC is quite mysterious Amy! Lovely use of adjectives in your descriptions too which have made this a good piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading your piece of writing, and the ending makes me want to know what happened next!

     
  3. Mrs Skinner

    November 21, 2011 at 2:45 pm

    Hello Amy! Now you have got me thinking. I wonder what was happening? Perhaps you could write the next part to let your readers know?!

     
  4. Nrs Robinson (100WC Team

    November 21, 2011 at 3:49 pm

    Hi Amy – great 100WC and thought your interpretation of the theme this week was brill. I liked the way you described the picnic – it made me wonder what you were having which is a skill to make the reader think beyond the written word. Keep it up.

     
  5. Hannah

    November 23, 2011 at 9:10 am

    Well done Amy your 100 word challenge is fabulous and I hope you carry on doing this writing. Your 100 word challenge is great and you made me want to read on.
    keep it up.

    Hannah at (High Lawn)

     

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