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100 WC Week 10 – Scarlett

18 Nov

She looked out across the calm turquoise sea to the vivid fire sunset. Alicia was on a safari holiday with her parents and today they had been out in the ancient land rovers to look for the lions. She inhaled a long deep breath. Walking towards the wooden cabins, she was staying in; she thought she heard a faint crunching noise of distant leaves rustling on the dry ground. Alicia tilted her head to where she thought the noise was coming from; she thought she could just make out a wide bold black line in the shape of a tree. As Alicia turned round it changed shape…

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8 responses to “100 WC Week 10 – Scarlett

  1. etp horse lover

    November 19, 2011 at 3:57 pm

    amazing

     
    • SB Art Lover

      November 21, 2011 at 10:57 am

      Thanks!

       
  2. Mrs Skinner

    November 19, 2011 at 5:12 pm

    This is a great piece of writing Scarlett. I can hear those leaves & can imagine that deep breath. Of course, you know what I’m going to say now don’t you? What happened next??! Thank you for writing on the 100WC this week!

     
    • SB Art Lover

      November 21, 2011 at 10:58 am

      I don’t know what happens next, maybe I could write about it in the next 100WC?

       
  3. minimitch246

    November 19, 2011 at 8:45 pm

    I like how you could make out a bold black line in the shape of a tree Scarlett
    well done!

     
    • SB Art Lover

      November 21, 2011 at 11:00 am

      I think I could have been a bit more descriptive?

       
  4. Miss Bowden

    November 19, 2011 at 10:41 pm

    What a fantastic descriptive piece of writing Scarlett! This is such a descriptive and exciting piece of writing. I love the descriptive language you have used, for example ‘calm turquoise sea to the vivid fire sunset’ and faint crunching noise of distant leaves rustling on the dry ground’. This really sets the scene for your reader. Also, what a brilliant cliff hanger to have at the end! I am on the edge of my seat, I want to know what it is that has been seen! A brilliant ending to hook your reader in Scarlett, well done 🙂 . A superb 100WC submission Scarlett! I can not wait for another submission soon.

     
  5. mrcobbsclass

    November 20, 2011 at 8:36 pm

    I really like this piece of writing, its descriptive and leaves me wanting more. I also like the way you have used “She inhaled a long deep breath” to show how Alicia has a lot to think about. Next time perhaps write something which doesn’t end on a cliffhanger – its good sometimes to have a conclusion to an idea.

     

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