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100 WC Week 6 – Billy

17 Oct

Bang ! the noise was so loud. The rockets zoomed up and exploded like cannon fire in the distance. My ears were popping , I looked up at the fireworks once again , this time they were louder. The unbearable smell of torches and bangers rose from the ground. I ran to dad and he gave me the ear muffs , the noise was suddenly softened by the squidgy foam. In my muted world, I gazed up at the jet black sky and experienced an amazing sight.

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7 responses to “100 WC Week 6 – Billy

  1. Mrs Skinner

    October 17, 2011 at 10:28 pm

    Unbearable, squidgy, muted – just a few of the fabulous words you have used in this piece Billy which give your readers a wonderful picture of the fireworks. Excellent writing! I’m so glad you shared it on the 100wC!

     
  2. Hannah

    October 18, 2011 at 8:05 pm

    Wow! Billy your one hundred word challenge is fabulous and I can’t wait till you keep doing the one hundred word challenge. You gave the reader tension and I would like to keep reading your one hundred word challenges . Your writing is fabulous.

     
  3. SB Art lover

    October 18, 2011 at 8:08 pm

    Well done! I have just looked on the 100WC blog and have seen that you have been picked for the week 6 showcase. I really like your writing and I think it is inspired by bonfire night?

     
  4. Hannah

    October 18, 2011 at 8:42 pm

    Well done Billy I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge . You built tension and your story was just fab. Keep going and I am sure you will be the best writer.

     
  5. Claire Radd

    October 18, 2011 at 9:42 pm

    Hi There!
    I love the way you described how it felt to have the ear muffs on – a muted world!
    Keep up the good work!
    Mrs Radd šŸ™‚

     
  6. mrcobbsclass

    October 19, 2011 at 8:38 pm

    This is great writing well done. I really like the way you used ‘ In my muted world, I gazed up …’ to start a sentence. Try to use sentences that start this way in your next piece of writing. Well done again, super writing. šŸ™‚

     
  7. Gill Robins

    October 26, 2011 at 7:15 pm

    Your choice of words is really powerful and it painted some powerful images in my mind. I loved the idea of the muted world and I was right there, experiencing it with you. What a mature writer!

     

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