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100 WC Week 6 – KH

16 Oct

The noise was so loud that my heart beat faster every second.So I got up to see what the noise was but there was no-one there, then I shouted ‘who’s making that noise?’, but there was no answer just an echo of my voise.Just then the noise got louder so I went to ask mum what the noise was but she didn’t know. it semed like it was me who cares.But I was so detemned to find out what the noise was.Then my mum came up and said it is time for bed,so I got in to bed and pretended to go to sleep but as soon as mum went out the door I got straight up.Then I went to the window and it was really windy all of a sudden, then I thought that I would never find out what the noise was. Then I turned around and saw that it was my cat hiding behind my bed,he was scared of the storm. So it was my cat making the noise all along!

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Posted by on October 16, 2011 in Information

 

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4 responses to “100 WC Week 6 – KH

  1. mrcobbsclass

    October 16, 2011 at 7:37 pm

    Well done. I like some of your word choices – like determined and pretended. Next time try and start sentences with different connectives, so sentences don’t always start with then. Perhaps use; after that, meanwhile or even next.

     
  2. Rm Horse lover

    October 17, 2011 at 8:57 am

    That is a really good piece of writing i was very exited about what the noise was!
    Well done Katy!

     
  3. Mrs Skinner

    October 17, 2011 at 3:40 pm

    Thank you for writing two pieces for the 100WC this week Katy. I’m not sure that such a loud noise could be made by a cat but then perhaps she is a noisy animal! 😉

     
  4. EG

    November 16, 2011 at 2:41 pm

    I liked your writing it was very good I don’t thinck it was bad atal it was all good. 🙂

     

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