The rain was pounding against my face as I sprinted further and further into the random darkness. I ran on, and on, until I couldn’t go on anymore. With the shadow of the castle looming over me I slumped myself down onto the cold wet stone. Where could I go next? Where could I run? I could hear the booming of his voice running after me. I curled myself up into a tight ball and closed my eyes. I held my breath as the loud footsteps ran past me, the iron footsteps, of an iron statue….
I was lucky, I got away
Mr Cobb's Class Blog 
Mrs Skinner
September 28, 2011 at 5:58 pm
I really liked this piece Kaiya because it is full of tension. You made my heart pound as I was reading it. One picky point – not sure darkness is ever random. Thank you so much for joining the 100WC!
mrcobbsclass
September 29, 2011 at 8:30 pm
I like how you have started this piece, it got me wanting to find out why you were running. I also liked the use of the rhetorical questions. Well done Kaiya.
horse lover etp
September 30, 2011 at 7:58 pm
amazing story kaiya
BDG world saver
October 3, 2011 at 8:58 am
I think this a good story I like the verbs you yoused.
Wendy
October 3, 2011 at 11:48 pm
Hello I am a student from busy bees at the bay. My name is Wendy.
I think that your story was great.
From Wendy
katie
October 5, 2011 at 8:57 am
that was cool
5D
October 5, 2011 at 9:07 am
that was lucky
sonny:) 🙂