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Workhouse Escape

26 Sep

In Literacy we’ve been looking at whether Jim should escape the Workhouse or not. Look at these notes about persuading him of one course of action. What have the authors done well? How persuasive are the notes? What could they do next time?

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Posted by on September 26, 2011 in Information

 

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32 responses to “Workhouse Escape

  1. etp

    September 26, 2011 at 11:49 am

    they are very persausive writings

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      September 26, 2011 at 11:52 am

      What makes it persuasive ETP?

       
      • etp

        September 26, 2011 at 11:53 am

        they used very good adjectives

         
      • etp

        September 26, 2011 at 11:56 am

        elliot’s is the most persausive

         
    • RC

      September 26, 2011 at 11:54 am

      Which one?

       
    • RC

      September 26, 2011 at 12:00 pm

      Why? 😦

       
  2. kh

    September 26, 2011 at 11:50 am

    some good notes and on megans I like the bit where you said you will get a punishment if you go.

     
  3. RC

    September 26, 2011 at 11:50 am

    I like Elliot’s the best because obviously it is persuasive!
    πŸ™‚

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      September 26, 2011 at 11:52 am

      In what way is it persuasive? What phrases make it persuasive?

       
      • RC

        September 26, 2011 at 11:53 am

        Because I like his guesses of what will happen. πŸ˜€

         
      • mrcobbsclass

        September 26, 2011 at 11:55 am

        Should we guess information? Can’t we use information from the text?

         
  4. TA

    September 26, 2011 at 11:50 am

    Verry good persion sentances about not to leave about Jim Jarvis.

     
  5. wh

    September 26, 2011 at 11:52 am

    Elliot that is an brilliant letter to Jim i realy liked reading it!!!!!!

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      September 26, 2011 at 11:53 am

      What makes it a brilliant letter? Tell me specifically what was well written.

       
      • wh

        September 26, 2011 at 11:58 am

        I liked reading reading Elliots letter because it is persuasive and it is a good peace of riting!

         
  6. RM horse lover

    September 26, 2011 at 11:53 am

    Great peices of writing really persausive i wouldnt leave if i got these notes.

    Well done!

    RM horse lover

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      September 26, 2011 at 11:53 am

      What is persuasive. Pick one phrase that really works.

       
      • RM horse lover

        September 26, 2011 at 11:58 am

        I like the phrase were it says that there is very very nasty people out on the street.

        Rm horse lover

         
  7. SB

    September 26, 2011 at 11:54 am

    Wow! MK’s one was really good. Maybe EW could make the writing a bit bigger, and I like HC’s phrase ‘beat you to death’.

     
  8. amm

    September 26, 2011 at 11:54 am

    I like eliots because it really purswades me not to go

     
  9. Ls

    September 26, 2011 at 11:54 am

    Thats a very good peice of writing I like the bit were it says go ahead its you choice

     
  10. fhc

    September 26, 2011 at 11:56 am

    I like it becaus you yoused the the word harsh.i thaut it was realy good.

     
  11. TA

    September 26, 2011 at 11:56 am

    I realy like Elliot’s one it was realy persuauasive.

     
  12. LL rugby lover

    September 26, 2011 at 11:57 am

    I like megans one and how it tells you how bad the conciquenses of the streeet will be πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

     
    • RC

      September 26, 2011 at 11:59 am

      Which parts of Megan’s writing do you like, LL? πŸ™‚

       
  13. EGmoo

    September 26, 2011 at 11:58 am

    Megan your piece of writing is good. Because u have really
    peswaded me to stay if I was jim

     
  14. MK TS

    September 26, 2011 at 11:58 am

    EW It was very good because it was very perswasive

     
  15. HCand ES pokemon lover

    September 26, 2011 at 11:59 am

    it was a brillant letter to Jim i like the bit when they said theres no food

     
  16. finfin

    September 26, 2011 at 11:59 am

    i think elliots is realy passwasive because you will probably starve out there.

     
  17. SH lego builder and BDG world saver

    September 26, 2011 at 11:59 am

    we think that EW’s work was very very persusive.

     
  18. EW

    September 26, 2011 at 12:00 pm

    I like the persuaisiveness of it and if i were Jim i would sertinly stay.

     

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