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Hindleap Warren Adverts

07 Mar

After our successful trips to Hindleap Warren last week we’ve been looking at how the centre could be advertised.  Have a listen to these audio files we recorded in the plenary of this morning’s session and see how successful we were?  Comment on this post about our use of persuasive language, alliteration, rhetorical questions and any other features of a good persuasive text.
ST&ES BK&KH BC&BDG LC&KS JH&LH MW&MK

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18 Comments

Posted by on March 7, 2011 in Information

 

18 responses to “Hindleap Warren Adverts

  1. Philip

    March 8, 2011 at 1:38 pm

    Wow were going on a trip soos I hope it was exiting for you 🙂

     
  2. TC

    March 8, 2011 at 2:02 pm

    They all were very persusive i liked bk,kh because they did so many things of persuion words. but they all need to add some more words about the activatys for persuion.

     
  3. BK and mk

    March 8, 2011 at 2:33 pm

    I really really like bc and bdc one its really funny! but its also very perswedive thouge i would love to go to muddy hindleap again now! PS great trip deffitly go!

     
  4. seeta

    March 8, 2011 at 2:36 pm

    I think its really great that you are doing work about things like that!
    🙂

     
    • mckenzie

      March 8, 2011 at 2:50 pm

      I agree with seeta

       
  5. LL

    March 8, 2011 at 2:37 pm

    I think they were all really persuasive especially bdg and bc’s one and it was really funny and persuasive 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂

     
  6. megan

    March 8, 2011 at 2:37 pm

    it sounds like you all had a really fun time .

     
  7. Sophie

    March 8, 2011 at 2:39 pm

    Those podcasts are very persuasive i would really like to go to hindleap it sounds so much fun 😉

     
  8. megan

    March 8, 2011 at 2:41 pm

    Wow i love the podcasts!

    * Amazing adjectives
    * Fabulous decription
    * Great persuasion
    (W) Could you use more adverbs!

    You have really persuaded me to go there!!!! 🙂

     
  9. Jade

    March 8, 2011 at 2:44 pm

    It sounds like you had fun time!
    🙂

     
  10. Sophie

    March 8, 2011 at 2:44 pm

    Here are your three star and a wish:

    *You have explained what activities are there.
    *You used adjectives.
    *You used persuasion.

    Wish: Try to use similes to describe activities.

     
  11. Emelia

    March 8, 2011 at 2:45 pm

    Hi my name is Emelia
    It was really good and it included:
    Star: Good persuasive language
    Star:Good Vocabulary
    Star: Good similes
    Well done;)

     
  12. seeta

    March 8, 2011 at 2:51 pm

    Hi my name Seeta and im from 6e we embellish death stars and where part of the qwad bloging!
    I really like ST&ES work! * I loved the way they described evry think!
    Make it a bit more louder!

     
  13. seeta

    March 8, 2011 at 2:51 pm

    Thankyou Mckenzie!

     
  14. Mary

    March 9, 2011 at 9:19 am

    * The way you speak about your trip is so descriptive

    * Amazing vocabulary

    * You explained about saftey

    (W) Be a bit louder

     
  15. EF

    March 9, 2011 at 11:55 am

    I really like bc bdg the way they say it like you really want to go there with all that fun

     
  16. lily!

    March 10, 2011 at 10:56 am

    I really like the ST and ES one, beause the people who have fears want to get over them and they said that it is a place to overcome your fears. I especially liked the description; It is surrounded by beautifull ashed out forest. Plus the rhetorical questions are amazing

     

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