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Home Learning 21-01-2011

20 Jan

Well done with your Pyramid Puzzles.  You have produced some fabulous pieces of work, with some tricky combinations of numbers and functions.  We’ll have a go at them all on Monday, so why not have a practise over the weekend.

This week’s home learning is a writing one.  As you know we have been writing stories inspired by Ancient Egypt this week.  Your task for home learning is to complete the next section of this story.  Think about using adjectives and adverbs to describe the setting and the movements of our intrepid explorer Frazer Blake as he enters the tomb.  Give yourself 30 minutes and get writing.

As he looked at the rough texture of the Pyramid, Frazer noticed an opening.  He stepped towards it and peered into the darkness. What could be within this ancient monument?  Switching on his torch, Frazer Blake decided to step in…

You can write on paper, or just add it to the blog as a comment.

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23 responses to “Home Learning 21-01-2011

  1. st

    January 21, 2011 at 5:06 pm

    i’ve finished. What shall I do?

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 21, 2011 at 7:24 pm

      It’s a completely different story. Have a go taking it a different way ST. Could the Mummy actually help you get out of the pyramid?

       
  2. KS

    January 22, 2011 at 4:02 pm

    As he looked at the rough texture of the Pyramid, Frazer noticed an opening. He stepped towards it and peered into the darkness. What could be within this ancient monument? Switching on his torch, Frazer Blake decided to step in… He entered the musty tomb and the only light was coming from the the torch he held in his sweaty hand, which cast eerie shadows that danced all around him. His shoes echoed on the dusty floor, scarab beetles ran up and down the walls. He turned the corner and saw a sarcophagus he turned towards it, suddenly a mummy jumped out and gave an ear splitting scream, Frazer turned and ran as fast as he could, through the long, winding corridors, with the mummy right behind him. Frazer could see the door in front of him, he ran through it and shut the door behind him, and breathed a sigh of relief.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 23, 2011 at 7:09 pm

      Great use of musty KS to describe the feeling of the tomb. Some great ideas, remember to not overuse commas – sometimes a full stop is needed. Well done!

       
  3. ST

    January 23, 2011 at 9:38 am

    As he looked at the rough texture of the Pyramid, Frazer noticed an opening. He stepped towards it and peered into the darkness. What could be within this ancient monument? Switching on his torch, Frazer Blake decided to step in…

    It was dark and spooky, Frazer Blake was a bit unsure about going any further through the old corridor, but he went further, he wasn’t scared. The walls were old and dusty and were covered in hieroglyphics. He walked further and further through dusty corridor when finally he reached a old creaky door, he tried to open it but it was really stiff then eventually it opened.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 23, 2011 at 7:08 pm

      Its suddenly opened – oh no! Could it be someone behind opening it? What might happen next ST? I like the use of description including the sounds around. Well done.

       
      • ST

        January 24, 2011 at 11:53 am

        The door creaked as it opened , I was scared, I walked through the door. Suddenly he felt a hand on his shouder, he really diden’t want look behind him, but he did. The thing was what he throght it was, a MUMMY! I ran for my life through a different corrador, he got to the end, it was a dead end.

         
  4. Jh

    January 23, 2011 at 11:27 am

    .. and have a good look round for himself. Once inside he heard the door close heavily behind him.He turned round quickly and saw that the passageway was blocked! He was in total darkness. “Suffering swordfish” Frazer muttered to himself. He walked forward a few steps and then stoped. Suddenly he heard a noise from behind him. “HAVE YOU BRUSHED YOUR TEETH SON”!!!!!!! That was the moment that Frazer knew the pyramids contained Mummy. His Mummy to be exact.

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 23, 2011 at 7:07 pm

      Great JH. A bit of a Tintin feels to this adventure, well done!

       
  5. bk

    January 23, 2011 at 2:28 pm

    so you have to make up a totally different story what i dont get it

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 23, 2011 at 7:06 pm

      Yeah, just 30 minutes of writing a continuation to this story. Give it a go and see what you come up with.

       
  6. LL

    January 24, 2011 at 6:54 pm

    Frazer turned towards the pyramid. It was a light shade of orangy yellow. He went inside. When he was inside he had a quick look around, the door shut behind him,all of a sudden he was alone in the dark pyramid. He lit a torch and went through a corridor. There were hieroglyphics all over the the walls. There was a loud groaning sound at the end of the passage. As Frazer walked towards it, the noise got louder. He came to a halt, the noise died down. It was all black in the passage suddenly two red eyes appeared then Frazer realised it was a… MUMMY! He ran in the opposite direction. The mummy chased him up and down the corridors like something out of Scooby Doo .

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 25, 2011 at 9:34 am

      Some great description LL, well done. I like your use of long and short sentences.

       
  7. SB

    January 24, 2011 at 7:18 pm

    As he looked at the rough texture of the pyramid, Frazer noticed an opening. He stepped towards it and peered into the darkness. What could be within this ancient monument? Switching on his torch, Frazer Blake decided to step in…As he entered the deserted tomb straightaway he smelt the difference. Inside smelt of stale bread and outside smelt fresh. Frazer decided to go further in. When he got deeper, it got much darker and for once Frazer thought that the torch was no use but he kept it on anyway. He brushed his hand against the crumbling stone walls and felt something bumpy, Frazer twisted the lens of his torch so it illuminated everything around him and there he saw a hieroglyph, to be exact he saw hundreds maybe even thousands of hieroglyphics . But the most intriguing thing was that right in front of him was a cold, old, wooden oak door. He pushed, it wasn’t locked, thankfully. He pushed it even harder the door lurched forwards and opened and there in front of him was a room made of solid gold. He stepped in

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 25, 2011 at 9:40 am

      Well done. You really get a sense of the tomb from your descriptions. I love the “Frazer twisted the lens of his torch so it illuminated everything around him” part. The use of illuminated and twisted is much better than he switched the torch on.

       
  8. BDG

    January 25, 2011 at 7:55 am

    It was pitch black and not as pretty as Frazer thought. The tomb had crumbled and had more cracks than he had expected. All around were enormous collapsed pillars. There was a echoing sound in the distance ”who are you ?”, suddenly the human’s eyes turned red or maybe he wasn’t a human…………….

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 25, 2011 at 9:37 am

      Ah! Creepy. I love the description of the dilapidated tomb.

       
  9. ef

    January 25, 2011 at 10:40 am

    It was dark and misty as Frazer stepped in to the tomb . Suddenly his leg got stuck between two rocks . He scrambled to get free . As he walked on he noticed a strange smell coming from the deep creepy corner. Slowly Frazer walked towards the tomb and slid back the creaking door to discover Tutankhamen’s death mask. He jumped back in fright as the mask turned towards him….

     
    • mrcobbsclass

      January 25, 2011 at 10:55 am

      Great writing EF, I like the suspense you built up in the last sentence. Well done, and get better soon.

       
  10. cp

    January 25, 2011 at 4:04 pm

    It was gloomy and cold compared to outside which was hot, sunny and very dusty, and Frazer’s eyes took a moment to adjust. To him it smelt like dead bugs and rotten egg shells and all he could hear was the buzzing sound of flies around his head. He felt excited but worried at the same time, because he had no idea who or what was in there.
    Now he could see a little better, Frazer looked down the murky passageway and found a battered wooden door. He walked towards it and saw the carving of a cobra coiling around a pole. Feeling very scared about what was beyond the door, he stepped through and found himself in an enormous chamber. Suddenly he saw lots of skeletons, human and animal, and Frazer immediately felt he should go back to the outside world. He turned around and there, blocking his escape, was a mummy! He ran for his life but the monster was too quick…

     
  11. SwH

    January 26, 2011 at 8:44 am

    In front of him were scarab beetles running up the tomb walls, cobwebs were hanging from every corner, Fraser Blake stood staring up at the ceiling which was painted with gold. He had never seen anything like it before. Suddenly he heard something in the darkness. He saw something move. Thankfully it was his shadow but it didn’t look right. It looked too ragged and he couldn’t see his cap. Suddenly he heard a clang! It was his torch. Bending over, he realised that it was broken. Cautiously he started to glue the bulb back together. He turned it on. Suddenly he jumped at the sight of a live … MUMMY!

     
  12. bk

    January 27, 2011 at 5:55 pm

    As Frazer shivered with fear as he walked deeper and deeper into the musty smell of the rotten tomb. But Frazer did not know what lied before him. A crumbling sound was at Frazer’s feet, he ran. The crumbling sound below his feet was coming closer and closer Frazer sprinted across the dust piled floor, the entrance coming closer and closer and than everything was quite and all you could hear was the sound of wicked laughter.

     
  13. Bk

    January 27, 2011 at 6:06 pm

    Frazer stepped into the rotten tomb, hands shaking, he started to walk deeper and deeper into the tomb,the dusty floors spraying dust up as Frazer walked down the skinny tunnel. But then the floor started to shake. Frazer ran. The crumbling floor coming closer and closer as Frazer headed to a bomend door.

     

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